語序與句式剖析

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日復(fù)1日地上班下班，平淡的日子便如流水一般在指縫中溜走了。早出晚歸的行色匆匆也令我無暇胡思亂想。

Humdrum days flow like water through my fingers as I go on daily trips to and from work—— early departure andlate return in such a hurry that little time is left for me to indulge in fanciful thought.



日復(fù)1日地上班下班，平淡的日子便如流水一般在指縫中溜走了。早出晚歸的行色匆匆也令我無暇胡思亂想。

Humdrum days flow like water through my fingers as I go on daily trips to and from work—— early departure andlate return in such a hurry that little time is left for me to indulge in fanciful thought.



網(wǎng)友的翻譯非常不錯，意思非常到位。從語言表達(dá)多元化的角度，我試著用淺顯的“詩歌” 語言，翻譯一下，與網(wǎng)友共勉。

I go to and get off work day after day,

and like running water the dull days slip away.

Early departure and late return in such a hurry,

leave me with no time to think deeply.